Picture a really bad after school special and then multiply that by about 10. The screenplay had no direction and a very very choppy sequence of events; Absolutely no character arch and hardly any pivot points.
Yes, I'm technical, and as an aspiring screenwriter I really want to know how Luna got this film produced.... I was writing better crap in UCLA film school. But anyhow, on with my critique.
It's a lesson in charity and giving and realizing what's really important in life, but it seems like Luna suffocates you with it. At many times the dialogue seems too "preachy"; we're kinda scratching our heads and saying to ourselves, "didn't she just make that point"? In film you need to SHOW us not TELL us and this is what I mean by a choppy flow of the story. Maybe this would have made a better stage play.
Then, a hilarious event which would NEVER happen in which a queer Texas boy is "man handled" into baptizing into a Mexican church.... and then a lady named "Miss Piggy" who owns the only restaurant in town got a really big laugh.
To take the cake though, was a 15 minute monologue by a handicapped robust woman about her take on church and religion. WOW, don't bother seeing this one.
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