Talk:Tumor lysis syndrome

Hello everyone, I am a fourth year medical student who will be editing the Tumor lysis syndrome page as part of a Wikipedia elective course at my institution. In particular, I have noticed that many statements are in need of references. I plan to go through each statement in the article and assigning high quality references where appropriate. I also plan to add information to the articles from high quality sources, or make adjustments as needed to existing statements in the article to align information to those sources. I also plan to make edits to improve the article’s overall readability wherever possible.

As part of my proposed work plan, I plan to achieve certain goals by each of the following dates:

3/3: Choose Wikipedia article. Find high quality, non-primary sources. Post my workplan on the article’s talk page.

3/11: Finish first round of edits adding references to existing statements without a current reference. Make any changes to existing statements to align to newly cited references.

3/18: Additional edits including those aimed to improve the article’s grammar and overall readability as needed. Consider including a “pathophysiology” section and/or “prognosis” section as suggested in the Wikipedia Manual of Style. Edits to article to undergo peer-review from another student in the elective.

3/25: Course wrap-up. Review all changes, incorporate any changes/feedback from peer-review process.

WikiUser950 (talk) 19:41, 3 March 2022 (UTC)Reply

PEER REVIEW: by Dr. Sardinha (talk) 15:50, 21 March 2022 (UTC) Overall, I think you did some amazing work here! Since the very beginning you sought to improve the readability of the article and I do believe the article is less redundant and more clear. The resources you've contributed are current and completes the first goal you intended to accomplish. I understand that nausea/vomiting are rather vague and you decided to put them to signs and symptoms which I feel is also more appropriate. I also think they are vague and could be omitted, but I can also see why it may be important they they are there, so I admire how you opened up to the Wikipedian community to see what they have to say as well. I also love what you did to create the hyperlinks for some and aligned the reference with the articles. I think it can sometimes be easy to mix up articles if you have a lot on your computer, and making sure they match to every statement is important for readability and allows reader to see where you get the information from.Reply

The biggest changes you set to do was the prevention and treatment sections. I did see, for instance, under the Acute Kidney Injury section that a few of the references were from 2008 or 2011 and I wonder if there are more current articles that describe prevention strategies for AKI. I know it may seem obvious and prevention strategies may be well characterized but I may be nice to have a more updated article in this section. It looks like the main article is from 2011 from Tumor Lysis Syndrome NEJM but perhaps they have a more updated one you can use if treatment strategies have not changed since then.

I also appreciate you adding prevention strategies for cardiac arrhythmia - a very serious life threatening complication. I am surprised cardiac monitoring was not in the article before but definitely should have been, so good job making sure to include this in the article! The treatment and prognosis sections are also great additions. I would refrain from using urine output maybe or "temporizing" because maybe a lot of people don't know what that means but I can also see why you used that there.

For overall tone and balance, I thought content that was added is neutral and I did not find any claims there were heavily biased towards a particular position. In fact, I thought there were a few resources you added that better aligned with the statement than before. I did not find that the content you added attempted to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another and the article is overall well written, clear and concise!

RESPONSE TO PEER REVIEW: First I would like to thank user Dr. Sardinha for the peer-review - I really appreciate the kind words and thoughtful suggestions. I appreciate that you looked at my specific goals and tailored you review to those goals.

Per your comments, I will make sure to leave the comment for the wikipedia comments upon making the change for removing nausea/vomiting (in case a wiki user would like to revert that change). I will also go back and add more hyperlinks for areas where wiki readers may want more information. I can go back and change the wording of "temporizing" and "urine output" and I am glad you pointed that out in order to improve understanding from the general audience. I can also go back and review references to see if there are better/more recent reviews that I could use!

Thanks! WikiUser950 (talk) 16:42, 25 March 2022 (UTC)Reply

This article was categorized based on scheme outlined at WP:DERM:CAT. Calmer Waters 04:44, 27 February 2010 (UTC)Reply

doi:10.1056/NEJMra0904569 is the NEJM review that has just appeared. JFW | T@lk 22:58, 17 May 2011 (UTC)Reply

UK - adults and children. Only focuses on haematological malignancies. doi:10.1111/bjh.13403 JFW | T@lk 12:05, 23 April 2015 (UTC)Reply

Risk Factors Section: To make this section more useful to reads I divided up the risk factors into 3 main categories (patient factors, tumor factors, and chemotherapy factors). All of these play an different or additive role in the development of tumor lysis syndrome and is important to understand in order to make the appropriate risk-stratification in patients. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ulyros (talk • contribs) 01:12, 8 December 2015 (UTC)Reply

  This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 28 February 2022 and 27 March 2022. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): WikiUser950 (article contribs).