Talk:Kongsfjord Telemetry Station/GA1

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Reviewer: Starstriker7 (talk · contribs) 05:18, 16 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

I'll review this article. --Starstriker7^(Talk) 05:18, 16 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

Reference articles: Lynemouth power station, Hydro-Québec's electricity transmission system, Fort Stanton (Washington, D.C.) (to gauge what building articles ought to have)

• "A similar facility was located at Kjeller and one was being constructed in Tromsø." - It sounds awkward. I recommend phrasing it as "Two similar facilities, a completed one at Kjeller and one under construction in Tromsø, had already been initiated." if it does not affect the meaning.
  • Fixed. Arsenikk ^(talk) 11:06, 17 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
• "Necessary movable property was conveyed in exchange for a moderate compensation." - Can you rephrase this to make it more clear?
  • Fixed. Arsenikk ^(talk) 11:06, 17 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
• "and bars places at each end." - I also do not completely understand what this means.
  • Fixed. Arsenikk ^(talk) 11:06, 17 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
• "The various satellites using the facility conducted measurements of solar radiation, cosmic radiation, the polar ionosphere, and ionizing and dynamic effects regarding electric currents and magnetic disturbances" - Is "ionizing" its own point. or is it a part of the "dynamic effects regarding electric currents and magnetic disturbances" clause?
  • It is part of the clause, so it should be written correct. Arsenikk ^(talk) 11:06, 17 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
• "Magnetic tapes were sent to Darmstadt every other week, first via aircraft to Longyearbyen and then onwards" - "and then onwards". I feel like this might have been an incomplete sentences. Did you mean that, afterwards, they instead used the nearer airport in Ny-Ålesund?
  • Fixed. Arsenikk ^(talk) 11:06, 17 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
• Was the Ijsford Radio station the precursor to the Kongsfjord Telemetry Station, or is it a different and unaffiliated station? In any case, this should be made clear.
  • It's a bit on the side, so I've made a note. Arsenikk ^(talk) 11:06, 17 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

I did some copyediting. If you disagree with any of the changes, bring up the concern here and we will work out any disagreements.

I've verified references 4, 5, 8, 9, 10, 11,17, 19, 25, and 26. For references 1, 2, 3, 6, 7, 12, 13, 14, 15, 16, 18, 20, 21, 22, 23, 24, 27 and 28, I do not know how to access the references. Based on how I've used machine translations, I am taken to a screen that informs me that books with some license applied are only available to those with Norwegian IP addresses. If this is the case, I cannot access these references from the United States. Can you confirm this?

Yes, the links for most of the books located at the national library links are not available without a Norwegian IP address. Even with access they would not be copy-and-pastable, so a machine translation would not be easy. Arsenikk ^(talk) 11:06, 17 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

Alright. I will accept all referencing from these Norway-specific references in good faith. --Starstriker7^(Talk) 04:16, 18 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

Criterion 4 (neutrality) and Criterion 5 (stability) passed. From what I can tell, Criterion 3 is also satisfied, based on reference articles on other utility buildings (all involve descriptions of the facilities and the history, construction and operation of said facilities, which you discuss). I have checked the images and Criterion 6 is also set. I have evaluated Criterion 1 (leaving the comments above), and will evaluate Criterion 2 (referencing) in a moment. --Starstriker7^(Talk) 06:08, 16 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

Thank you for taking the time to review the article. Arsenikk ^(talk) 11:06, 17 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

You are welcome. Keep up the good work, as always; I always enjoy reading the articles you have authored. I will pass the article momentarily. --Starstriker7^(Talk) 04:16, 18 June 2012 (UTC)Reply