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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Karl Thielscher/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: BeanieFan11 (talk · contribs) 02:54, 26 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 04:00, 26 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
  • Add period after Dartmouth in lead.
  • Lead needs expanded.
  • Any source for Barney being his nickname?
  • Any source for "Sr."
  • Add "Karl Leavitt Thielscher" to the body since that was his birth name.
  • New high school infobox formatting.
  • His PFA profile says he was with Dartmouth from 1913 to 1916 and was a three-year letterman. Add that to the body and infobox.
  • Added cats: Baseball players from Massachusetts, American military personnel of World War I, National Football League officials
  • Added commonscatinline.
  • Link team captain in early life.
  • "returning to his alma mater as an assistant coach" what sports?
  • Need to add coaching cats
  • is there a link for Aviation Corps?
  • "Thielscher was given the rank of lieutenant." No source
  • Is there a link for Camp Robinson?
  • That note needs sources.
  • link fair catch.
  • "After APFA official Eugene W. Garson was severely injured in a Buffalo All-Americans game" The heck? That's gonna need some details, lol.
  • "He officiated their game against the Columbus Panhandles, a 38–0 win for the All-Americans." No source.
  • "In 1923, Thielscher returned to his alma mater of Dartmouth College to assist the coaching staff" What sports?
  • "both of which" shouldn't that say "both of whom"?
  • "couple had two sons, Karl Jr., and David, both of which played college football at Dartmouth College." Remove College and just put Dartmouth, Dartmouth College was already spelled out two sentences before.
  • "Madison Avenue Presbyterian Church" looks like there is a link for that (Madison Avenue Presbyterian Church)

Nice research again. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 04:15, 26 October 2024 (UTC)Reply