Some people do not go directly to college but travel

or work for a short time. Discuss both views and give

your opinion

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In this day and age, more and more contemporary

attention has been placed on the fact that some
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students choose to travel or look for short time jobs
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rather than going directly to college. In my opinion,
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this tendency brings more practical value than
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On the one hand, travelling or working can make

students more mature in the way how they behave
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in life In other words, when being in a new place
which is significantly more complex than schools, the
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do they have to protect them self from being lured
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into bad things. Moreover, it is the valuable
experience and lessons that people may perceive
when being exposed to a new mindset makes
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travelling and working more popular. For example, ra đọc k hiểu

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good cook, he or she also need to practise cooking
frequently or travel many places in the world to
understand deeply about the recipes. Additionally,
doing such jobs can make them practice many skills
such as problem-solving or time management which
are highly useful for the studying or their carrer path.

On the other hand, there are still some disavantages

behind this trend. Firstly, due to the shortage of
knowledege, students may be exploited at work or
deceived into wrong doings. For example,
employers can pay them a low allowance for the
reason of not sufficent about experience. Moreover,
students may fail to pursuing the higher knowledge
after a time of travelling and working because they
find it hard to join in a new community. For instance,
when coming back to the university, their old
classmates have all graduated, which may cause an
extreme depress for the studying.

In conclusion, I strongly affirm that travelling or

working for a short time before going to the college
can brings more benefits than drawbacks for all
reasons which are mentioned above.
BAI VIET LAN 2

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In this day and age, more and more contemporary

attention has been placed on the fact that some
students travel or look for short time jobs rather than
go directly to college. In my opinion, this tendency
brings more practical values than drawbacks, which
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all be clarified in this essay.

On the one hand, travelling or working can make

students more mature in life. In other words, being in
a new place which is significantly more complex than
schools can teach students how to treat people well
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and responese quickly in different situations.
Moreover, when travelling and working, students are
exposed to a new mindset, as a result, they can
perceive valuable experience and lessons. For
example, pursuing knowledege of food cannot make
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a good cook, he or she also need to practise make a student become a good cook

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world to understand deeply about the recipes.

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practice many skills such as problem-solving or time
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management which are highly useful for the studying
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or their carrer path.

On the other hand, there are some disavantages

behind this trend. Firstly, due to the shortage of
knowledege, students may be exploited at work or
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deceived into wrong doings. For example,
employers can pay them a low allowance for the
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reason of not sufficent about experience. Secondly,
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students may fail to pursuing the higher knowledge
after a time of travelling and working because they
may find it hard to join in a new community. For
instance, when coming back to the university, their
old classmates have all graduated, which may cause
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an extreme depress for the studying. study

In conclusion, I strongly affirm that travelling or

working for a short time before going to the college
can brings more benefits than drawbacks for all
reasons which are mentioned above.
BÀI VIẾT LẦN 3

307 words

In this day and age, more and more contemporary

attention has been placed on the fact that some
students travel or look for short time jobs rather than
go directly to college. In my opinion, this tendency
brings more practical values than drawbacks, which
will be clarified in this essay.

On the one hand, travelling or working can make

students more mature in life. In other words, being in
a new place which is significantly more complex than
schools can teach students how to treat people well
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and behave quickly in different situations. Moreover,
when travelling and working, students are exposed
to a new mindset, as a result, they can perceive
valuable experience and lessons. For example,
pursuing knowledege of food cannot make a student
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become a good cook, consequently, he or she
needs to practise cooking frequently or travel to
many places in the world to understand deeply
about the recipes. Additionally, doing short time jobs
can make them improve many skills such as
problem-solving or time management which are
highly useful for their studying or their future carrer
path.

On the other hand, there are some disavantages

behind this trend. Firstly, due to the shortage of
knowledege, students may be exploited at work or
deceived into doing bad things. For example,
employers can pay them a low allowance due to the Commented [MOU24]: Their

lack of experience. Secondly, students may fail to

pursue the higher knowledge after a time of
travelling and working since they may find it hard to
join in a new community. For instance, when coming
back to the university, their old classmates have all
graduated, which may make them lose motivation
in studying.

In conclusion, I strongly affirm that travelling or

working for a short time before going to the college
can brings more benefits than drawbacks for all
reasons mentioned above.
1. Expose (v) to create conditions that allow
someone the opportunity to do, learn, or
experience something:
 expose to a new mindset to a new mindset
2. Exploit (v) to use someone or something unfairly
for your own advantage
3. Motivation (n) the need or reason for doing
something
 lose motivation
4. Allowance: money that you are given regularly,
especially to pay for a particular thing