UPM-CALC /AP PORTFOLIO/BBI2423/FORM 2A

Based on your video recorded presentation:

i. transcribe (NOT IPA symbols) your presentation;
ii. number your utterances;
iii. fill in the table below using complete sentences;
iv. identify your strengths and weakness(es), and make appropriate improvements where applicable.

PRESENTER 1

Section A. Introduction

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Attention getter
Assalamu’alaikum warahmatullahi wabarakatuh and very good Strength Weakness and improvement
morning to our beloved lecturer, Miss Faezah and our beloved Have a slight attention getter Attention getter is not exciting
friends. So, here I am Amirul Asyraaf bin Anuar , and this is my enough
partner,Olivera Leleng Endorobot. So,today, I would like to tell Establishing credibility
you about the benefits of exercising during pregnancy. Ya, you Strength Weakness and improvement
know, pregnant woman usually get tired easily so, aaa, I will tell
you again, exercising is beneficial for pregnant woman as it can
help them to prepare their body for labor and delivery of the baby.
Introducing the topic and previewing the main points
Okay, so, my friends, usually we don’t know the pregnant aaa we
can make a difference between the pregnant woman that do Strength Weakness and improvement
exercises and those don’t do exercise aaa because if you can
see the diffence, you will know the pregnant woman that do Can introduce to people basic Does not have a good explanation
exercises will said they can deliver the baby easily. information to the topic
Enhancer (Transition between introduction and the body)
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Repetition on sentences
Have an additional introduction or
facts to support the main topic

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Section B. Body (Point 1)

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Main idea
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So, let’s aaa, I want talk about my point, first of all, the benefits of
exercises during pregnancy is to maintain physical fitness and Main idea not expanded correctly
overall health. Okay , guys, aaa when we do exercise, we can Have a valid main idea. making it an incomplete sentence.
maintain our physical fitness such as, it can strengthen our Supporting point
hands, our stomach, and our legs. Although , we have a baby Strength Weakness and improvement
inside, I don’t know if I can feel it but I know the woman whose Too much grammar error and too
pregnant is very tired because they have aa they need to carry a Have a good supporting point and much stutter.
large responsibility. So, if they do the exercises, it can help to using own language.
maintain their physical fitness such as, they can do the homework
like cleaning the dishes, swipe the floor, and go to the office. Details/ Examples
Although, they have to bring their task or anything to the office, Strength Weakness and improvement
they can easily get up from chair and going to another side by Using latest information about the Repetition in supporting point and
side and of course it also can make them become healthy. So, topic . examples
for example I want to talk about aaa this example is very good
because I was read many people was uneasy when Olympic Enhancer (Transitions between ideas)
volleyball aaa player Carrie Wars Jenning has received an ok Strength Weakness and improvement
from her institution to play volleyball while pregnant. Hmmm , so Point that have been delivered is clear Repetition in sentence in other
without wasting our time, I would like to pass aaa the main idea to point.
my friend, Olivera Leleng.
Supporting point
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Have a good supporting point. Clear Using direct translate in the
and understandable. sentence

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Aaa Leleng, before you conclude it, can I add my point? Okay , Details/ Examples
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my point next is exercise also help to lower the blood pressure.
Example are obtained from articles
Blood pressure tends to get up during pregnancy, bu, aaa staying which is scientific and valid. Too many examples than
active can prevent the blood aaa pressure from rising. So, to supporting point.
Enhancer (Transitions between speakers)
support my details, for instance, in one study, brisk walking Strength Weakness and improvement
regularly 3 times a week is a good kind of exercises to lower Point that have been delivered is clear Repetition in sentence in other
point.
blood pressure. So, in this case we can aaa lower the stress of
the pregnancy women.
Language used
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Can connect one point to another.
Other than that, can give a proper Too many grammar error and
examples. pause.

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PRESENTER 2

Section C. Body (Point 2)

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Main idea
Thank you Amirul for giving up his point about benefits of Strength Weakness and improvement
exercises during pregnancy. Now, I would like to proceed to the Main idea delivered clearly Elaborations should be expanded.
next point of this topic that is exercising is beneficial for pregnant
woman because it can help them to cope better with aches and Supporting point
pain during labor. As we know, regular exercise doesn’t only give Strength Weakness and improvement
woman the fitness but also it can strengthen their muscle. For a Have a clear supporting point Elaboration not enough making it
pregnant woman, it is good for them to exercise that involving not interesting
their abdominal and hip area. This is because, this part is one of Details/ Examples
the most important part of muscles in the labor process. For Strength Weakness and improvement
example, emm stretching and yoga are the best exercises to aaa,
Examples are good because they can Some examples are not valid.
for example, emm yoga and stretching are the good example of
relate to daily life.
exercises to the body part because woman can exercise without
Enhancer (Transitions between ideas)
giving big impact to their baby. Next, my point is it can help the
opening of the pelvis during labor. Moderate exercises can Strength Weakness and improvement
soothe joints and muscles, making pregnant woman more flexible Repetition in sentence in other
and the labor job will go easily. For example, there are chemical Point that have been delivered is clear point.
substances that called relaxin that necessary for making the
pelvis and hip joint ready for childbirth. Supporting point
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Have a good supporting point and Too much grammar error and too
using own language much stutter.
Details/ Examples
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Examples are clear and the audience Too many examples than
can understand it. supporting point.

Enhancer (Transitions between body to the conclusion)

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Point that have been delivered is clear Not enough elaboration

Section D. Conclusion

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Ok, now to conclude this, exercising during pregnancy is Concluding signal
beneficial for pregnant woman in order to ease their labor. But, Strength Weakness and improvement
before that, before they proceed to the next exercise, they have Can give signal to conclude the Conclusion too simple.
to consult with their health care provider and that’s all from us, presentation
thank you. Summarising key points
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Summary is short and simple N/A

Ending on a strong note

(making a memorable quotation or dramatic statement)
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N/A No quotation.

Language used
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Language used is understandable and Some grammar error and
easy for the audience to capture the repetition of sentences.
point that have been pointed.

EFFECTIVE: SEM 1, 15/16