The Science of Strong Business Writing
The Science of Strong Business Writing
The Science of Strong Business Writing
The
Business Science of Strong
Writing
by Bill Birchard
From the Magazine (July–August 2021)
Martina Paukova
Summary. Brain scans are showing us in new detail exactly what entices readers.
Scientists can see a group of midbrain neurons—the “reward circuit”—light up as
people respond to everything from a simple metaphor to an unexpected story twist.
The big takeaway?... more
Strong writing skills are essential for anyone in business. You need
them to effectively communicate with colleagues, employees, and
bosses and to sell any ideas, products, or services you’re offering.
Many people, especially in the corporate world, think good writing is
an art—and that those who do it well have an innate talent they’ve
nurtured through experience, intuition, and a habit of reading often
and widely. But every day we’re learning more about the science of
good writing. Advances in neurobiology and psychology show, with
data and in images, exactly how the brain responds to words, phrases,
and stories. And the criteria for making better writing choices are
more objective than you might think.
Good writing gets the reader’s dopamine flowing in the area of the
brain known as the reward circuit. Great writing releases opioids that
turn on reward hot spots. Just like good food, a soothing bath, or an
enveloping hug, well-executed prose makes us feel pleasure, which
makes us want to keep reading.
Most of the rules you learned in school—“Show, don’t tell” or “Use
the active voice”—still hold. But the reasons they do are now clearer.
Scientists using MRI and PET machines can literally see how reward
regions clustered in the midbrain light up when people read certain
types of writing or hear it spoken aloud. Each word, phrase, or idea
acts as a stimulus, causing the brain to instantly answer a stream of
questions: Does this promise value? Will I like it? Can I learn from it?
Kent Berridge, a pioneering University of Michigan psychologist and
neuroscientist, notes that researchers originally believed that the
reward circuit largely handled sensory cues. But, he explains, “it’s
become clear in the past 50 years from neuroimaging studies that all
kinds of social and cultural rewards can also activate this system.”
Whether it’s a succinct declarative statement in an email or a complex
argument in a report, your own writing has the potential to light up
the neural circuitry of your readers’ brains. (The same is true if you
read the words to an audience.) The magic happens when prose has
one or more of these characteristics: It’s simple, specific, surprising,
stirring, seductive, smart, social, or story-driven. In my work as an
author and a writing coach for businesspeople, I’ve found those eight
S’s to be hallmarks of the best writing. And scientific evidence backs
up their power.
Simplicity
“Keep it simple.” This classic piece of writing advice stands on the
most basic neuroscience research. Simplicity increases what scientists
call the brain’s “processing fluency.” Short sentences, familiar words,
and clean syntax ensure that the reader doesn’t have to exert too
much brainpower to understand your meaning.
By contrast, studies have shown that sentences with clauses nested in
the middle take longer to read and cause more comprehension
mistakes. Ditto for most sentences in the passive voice. If you write
“Profits are loved by investors,” for example, instead of “Investors
love profits,” you’re switching the standard positions of the verb and
the direct object. That can cut comprehension accuracy by 10% and
take a tenth of a second longer to read.
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So when you write your next memo, consider injecting words that
package feeling and thought together. Instead of saying “challenge the
competition,” you might use “outwit rivals.” In lieu of “promote
innovation,” try “prize ingenuity.” Metaphor often works even better.
Canadian researchers Andrea Bowes and Albert Katz tested relatively
bland phrases like “What a very good idea!” and “Be careful what you
say” against more-evocative expressions like “What a gem of an
idea!” and “Watch your back.” Readers reacted more strongly to the
latter.
Just a small touch can drive the neural circuits for emotion. So before
you start composing, get your feelings straight, along with your facts.
Zeal for your message will show through. And if you express your
emotion, readers will feel it.
Seductiveness
As humans, we’re wired to savor anticipation. One famous study
showed that people are often happier planning a vacation than they
are after taking one. Scientists call the reward “anticipatory utility.”
You can build up the same sort of excitement when you structure
your writing. In experiments using poetry, researchers found that
readers’ reward circuitry reached peak firing several seconds before
the high points of emphatic lines and stanzas. Brain images show
preemptive spikes of pleasure even in readers with no previous
interest in poetry.
You can generate a similar reaction by winding up people’s curiosity
for what’s to come. Steve Jobs did this in his famous “How to Live
Before You Die” commencement address to Stanford University’s
class of 2005. “I never graduated from college,” he began. “Truth be
told, this is the closest I’ve ever gotten to a college graduation. Today
I want to tell you three stories from my life. That’s it. No big deal. Just
three stories.” Are you on the edge of your seat to hear what the three
stories are?
So start a report with a question. Pose your customer problem as a
conundrum. Position your product development work as solving a
mystery. Put readers in a state of uncertainty so that you can then
lead them to something better.
Smart Thinking
Making people feel smart—giving them an “aha” moment—is another
way to please readers. To show how these sudden “pops” of insight
activate the brain, researchers have asked people to read three words
(for example, “house,” “bark,” and “apple”) and then identify a fourth
word that relates to all three, while MRI machines and EEGs record
their brain activity. When the study participants arrive at a solution
(“tree”), brain regions near the right temple light up, and so do parts
of the reward circuit in the prefrontal cortex and midbrain. The
readers’ delight is visible. Psychological research also reveals how
people feel after such moments: at ease, certain, and—most of all—
happy.
How can you write to create an aha moment for your readers? One
way is to draw fresh distinctions. Ginni Rometty, formerly IBM’s
CEO, offered one with this description of the future: “It will not be a
world of man versus machine; it will be a world of man plus
machine.”
Another strategy is to phrase a pragmatic message so that it also
evokes a perennial, universal truth. The late Max De Pree, founder
and CEO of the office furniture company Herman Miller, had a knack
for speaking to employees this way. In Leadership Is an Art he wrote:
“The first responsibility of a leader is to define reality. The last is to
say thank you. In between the two, the leader must become a servant
and a debtor.” That’s wisdom not just for business managers but for
parents, teachers, coaches—anyone in a guiding role.
Social Content
Our brains are wired to crave human connection—even in what we
read. Consider a study of readers’ responses to different kinds of
literary excerpts: some with vivid descriptions of people or their
thoughts, and others without such a focus. The passages that included
people activated the areas of participants’ brains that interpret social
signals, which in turn triggered their reward circuits.
We don’t want just to read about people, though—we want to
understand what they’re thinking as quickly as possible. A study led
by Frank Van Overwalle, a social neuroscientist at Vrije Universiteit
Brussel, found that readers infer the goals of people they’re reading
about in under 350 milliseconds, and discern their character traits
within 650 milliseconds.
One way to help readers connect with you and your writing is to
reveal more traces of yourself in it. Think voice, worldview,
vocabulary, wit, syntax, poetic rhythm, sensibilities. Take the folksy—
and effective—speeches and letters of Berkshire Hathaway CEO
Warren Buffett. His bon mots include “Someone’s sitting in the shade
today because someone planted a tree a long time ago,” “It’s only
when the tide goes out that you discover who’s been swimming
naked,” and “Beware of geeks bearing formulas.”
Remember also to include the human angle in any topic you’re
discussing. When you want to make a point about a supply-chain
hiccup, for example, don’t frame the problem as a “trucking
disconnect.” Write instead about mixed signals between the driver
and dispatcher.
Another simple trick to engage readers is to use the second person
(“you”), as I’ve done throughout this piece. This can be particularly
helpful when you’re explaining technical or complicated material. For
example, psychologist Richard Mayer and colleagues at the University
of California, Santa Barbara, ran experiments with two versions of an
online presentation on the respiratory system. Each included 100
words of spoken text paired with simple animations. But one version
used the impersonal third person (“During inhaling, the diaphragm
moves down, creating more space for the lungs…”), while the other
was more personal (“your diaphragm” and “your lungs…”). People
who listened to the latter scored significantly higher than their
counterparts on a test that measured what they had learned.
Storytelling
Few things beat a good anecdote. Stories, even fragments of them,
captivate extensive portions of readers’ brains in part because they
combine many of the elements I’ve described already.
Research by Uri Hasson at Princeton reveals the neural effect of an
engaging tale. Functional MRI scans show that when a story begins,
listeners’ brains immediately begin glowing in a specific pattern.
What’s more, that grid reflects the storyteller’s exactly. Other
research shows that, at the same time, midbrain regions of the reward
circuit come to life.
Experiments by behavioral scientists at the University of Florida
produced similar results. Brain images showed heightened activity in
reward regions among people who read 12-second narratives that
prompted pleasant images. (A sample narrative: “It’s the last few
minutes of the big game and it’s close. The crowd explodes in a
deafening roar. You jump up, cheering. Your team has come from
behind to win.”)
When you incorporate stories into your communications, big payoffs
can result. Consider research that Melissa Lynne Murphy did at the
University of Texas, looking at business crowdfunding campaigns.
She found that study participants formed more-favorable impressions
of the pitches that had richer narratives, giving them higher marks for
entrepreneur credibility and business legitimacy. Study participants
also expressed more willingness to invest in the projects and share
information about them. The implication: No stories, no great
funding success.
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The eight S’s can be your secret weapons in writing well. They’re
effective tools for engaging readers because they trigger the same
neural responses that other pleasurable stimuli do. And you probably
understand their value intuitively because millions of years of
evolution have trained our brains to know what feels right. So
cultivate those instincts. They’ll lead you to the writer’s version of the
Golden Rule: Reward readers as you would yourself.
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of this article appeared in the July–August 2021 issue of Harvard