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:{{done}} --'''[[User:Starstriker7|Starstriker7]]'''<sup>([[User talk:Starstriker7|Talk]])</sup> 05:36, 2 March 2011 (UTC)
<s>*”In other words, the star is about 35% more massive than the Sun and 84% wider.” While it is not a major issue, can something else be substituted for ‘in other words’, perhaps this sentence could be combined with the one preceding it with a word like ‘meaning that’ or something along those lines. Also does ‘more massive’ mean the same in this context as ‘larger’? Is so than that might make it look a little cleaner. Lastly, the ‘84% wider’ should be somewhere before what it is describing, the Sun. If this a little confusing here is a sample sentence, “… about 35% larger and 84% wider than the Sun” <
::More massive and larger are different; for example, an iron dumbbell would be more massive than a piece of plastic of the same shape and size. I've addressed your two other comments, though. --'''[[User:Starstriker7|Starstriker7]]'''<sup>([[User talk:Starstriker7|Talk]])</sup> 05:46, 2 March 2011 (UTC)
::: Ah, yes that makes sense. Thanks for the clarification. '''[[User:Felixboy|<span style="color:white;background:#06a">•F<span style="background:#388">e<span style="background:#6a5">l</span>i</span>x•</span>]] <sup>[[User talk:Felixboy|T]]</sup>''' 23:01, 2 March 2011 (UTC)
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